I looked over the proposal Student Example- 1.
I agree with the argument made in this proposal. Tuition
for students to go University and achieve a degree is extremely expensive,
especially for those who are from out of state. On top of fees for school, books
add a even heftier bill to the students, especially students in the science
field who require large scientific textbooks. If being able to access the
required books online would save students money, then I think it’s an idea that
should be looked into. Also, as said by the student, it would be making a step
towards becoming even more green campus wide.
I think the argument was fairly made; the student brought
two good points forward and even addressed the issues that this proposal would
face.
The audience for this proposal is the president of Arizona
State University, Mr. Crow. I think he appeals to Mr. Crow’s interests when he
mentions how this would aid the University to still be regarded as one a
University with one of the most environmentally friendly campuses. As a
president of the school I’m sure he takes pride in any innovation and
recognition the school has and receives, so this would make him take more notice
of this proposal. The student also states that it would help other students with
the cost of school. This would appeal to his values because a main concern is
always trying to keep costs of attending school as low as possible.
I believe the author’s ethos is strong, he wrote about
something that as a student he is personally involved in and affected by. This
means that it is something that he truly cares about and wants to see the change
made.
I would think that this would be a good model for our
project. The student is clear and concise about what he would like to have done,
and explains the benefits and setbacks that this proposal would bring. It would
obviously be very difficult to execute, but if enough people got on board it
could be possible.
The student researched the expected amount of e-reader
sales that would take place, and he also showed how much books are costing
students on average. He maybe could have done a survey to other students asking
them what they thought about his proposal. Had the percentage been high in
agreeing with his proposal then he would have had a very strong argument with
many students supporting his idea. The student also could have sought out how
many and which publishers are on board with making e-books for the textbooks,
and if the publishers used by the school right now create e-books. Having those
facts could have added extra padding to his argument.
Lori,
ReplyDeleteThis blog reads more like a free writing assignment than a cohesive response to the prompts. Further, it is not clear to me that you read the proposal assignment sheet because if you had, you would have been able to identify ways that these student examples are not consistent with what you are required to produce. Please familiarize yourself with the assignment sheet before you move forward.